Casey has Faded

Thank you, I'll be sure to take the advice of both of you into account when I do my final draft

Thank you!

none of the paragraphs copied through....sorry guys.

Prologue The HyperZone is an eight by eight mile block of land in Washington D.C that was bombed ten years ago. At exactly noon, three bombs went off in a ...

very interesting style. I'm not sure what is a typo and what's not. But I like it. I'm not sure how many people would, though. so just be careful.

great poem. I wouldn't change anything.

Thank you!

rip the veil rip me from my veil I do not want it. take the vision of self and security from my eyes, make me blind, give me a reason ...

great poem, well done. my only suggestion is to take out some of the commas. A phrase can gain importance or loose it, depending on how it is read/spoken. Sometimes ...

I'm in a bit of a I only looked at the dialogue... my only comment: you don't need to put asked, said, etc aftereach thing. Over lay it with and ...

beautiful. I think it's wonderful. Perfect. But, for the sake of giving a good, worth while comment, I'll tell you what my creative writing teacher told me. Simplicity is genius. ...

4th annual Day of Silence took place at my school. We get passes and remain silent, and if you have a class assignment where you HAVE to speak, you get ...

I remember windows 95....I had one, and then it shut down randomly in the middle of me typing my researchpaper which was due the next day....I cried. :cry:

I'm pretty sure there is a typo in the last line,but don't worry, tpyos rule my life. A very sad poem. Nest time, try showing rather than telling. compair (sp? ...

good...just remember that whenever you have puncuation, there is a pause (though the length of that pause depends on what the author wants). You have a lot of talent with ...